tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-843157865998502465.post2870508739124673228..comments2023-09-10T06:05:53.922-07:00Comments on QueenWriter News: DialogueAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16764188870806737138noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-843157865998502465.post-26180484490385846172008-12-09T10:52:00.000-08:002008-12-09T10:52:00.000-08:00Hi, Starr.Thanks for the support. I mentioned that...Hi, Starr.<BR/><BR/>Thanks for the support. I mentioned that my script might never see the light of day because of ownership issues rather than doubting my ability to write.<BR/><BR/>Someone has written a biography about Oliver Curtis Perry, so the issue of the right to tell his story has come up... I've done a lot of research outside of this author's particular biography, and the man was a real DJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07634449559548922053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-843157865998502465.post-57884291698466761232008-12-06T10:51:00.000-08:002008-12-06T10:51:00.000-08:00My piece her is from a novel in the works. I know ...My piece her is from a novel in the works. I know nothing about screenwriting. But here I am trying to cpature the friendship of two women. I confess-do a lot of telling, instead of showing to move the story along.<BR/>J.<BR/><BR/>“I can picture you as a nun,” Myrtle said, grinning. It was true. Lorene had a serene, kind look, that would have suited a nun’s countenance perfectly.<BR/>“That’s whatAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-843157865998502465.post-61652635612763968102008-12-05T19:25:00.000-08:002008-12-05T19:25:00.000-08:00Starr,I personally love dialog, however, the unnec...Starr,<BR/><BR/>I personally love dialog, however, the unnecessary kind, I feel I kick to the curb, i.e., "How are you?" I like to get to the meat of whatever's going on between the characters. I think dialog allows the characters to tell the story rather than the author, if you understand my meaning. Not that an author's voice doesn't have a place in their own work, quite the contrary, in fact. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-843157865998502465.post-58884631098661409622008-12-05T14:07:00.000-08:002008-12-05T14:07:00.000-08:00DJ,I like your dialogue here. Perhaps in screenwri...DJ,<BR/><BR/>I like your dialogue here. Perhaps in screenwriting it's different (I confess to know next to nothing about screenwriting), but I wouldn't be able to tell who's talking without their names in the foreground.<BR/><BR/>As to you saying, "may never see the light of day" about your script, don't think negative. Always think positive. Keep plugging along; it's what we all do. But NEVER Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16764188870806737138noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-843157865998502465.post-37736190509024736152008-12-05T09:37:00.000-08:002008-12-05T09:37:00.000-08:00Here's a more on the nose version:PERRY - Why did ...Here's a more on the nose version:<BR/><BR/>PERRY - Why did you bring me out here?<BR/><BR/>RANCHER - Because I know you're a criminal who spent three years in a Minnesota prison.<BR/><BR/>PERRY - I haven't stolen anything from you.<BR/><BR/>RANCHER - But you're in love with my daughter.<BR/><BR/>PERRY - She's a beautiful girl.<BR/><BR/>RANCHER - Leave her alone, or I will kill you.<BR/><BR/>JustDJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07634449559548922053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-843157865998502465.post-37817987539364444512008-12-05T09:27:00.000-08:002008-12-05T09:27:00.000-08:00What I always tell people about dialogue is it mus...What I always tell people about dialogue is it must either move the plot along or reveal character.<BR/><BR/>In other words, don't put into dialogue the mundane things we actually say to each other, like "How're you doing?" "Fine, how about you?" etc. Nor have someone tell someone else something they already know.<BR/><BR/>To make it easier for your reader, always begin a new paragraph when Marilyn Meredith a.k.a. F. M. Meredithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04179984154939161530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-843157865998502465.post-76594777712440323252008-12-05T09:25:00.000-08:002008-12-05T09:25:00.000-08:00Proper use of dialogue is always a hot topic in sc...Proper use of dialogue is always a hot topic in screenwriting circles. The definition of "on the nose" is something that many screenwriters find hard to understand. It's really important to say what needs to be said without being too direct about it. Otherwise, your dialogue will be labeled as on the nose.<BR/><BR/>And sprinkling in dialect is also an issue of contention. We need to define our DJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07634449559548922053noreply@blogger.com